Guess the Plot
Portal to Murder
1. Damien discovers a portal to another world where he can murder anyone, without getting caught. He figures, Cool, man, and embarks on a manic blood binge.
2. It was the perfect crime, the victim killed in a locked room. Detective Anna Hicks can come up with only one explanation: a portal to the ninth dimension.
3. Michael Spinner traveled through time to kill the man who ruined him. Just his luck, detective Jennifer Castle happens to be the nexus of time-travel itself.
4. A bottle of Windex reveals a shadowplay of long-ago betrayal in Helen's clouded bedroom mirror. Will Helen solve a murder...or become a victim?
5. Excessive debt from recreational shopping breaks Dorothy’s spirit. The Nordstrom’s annual shoe sale becomes her portal to murder as she goes on a killing spree of pushy women shoppers.
6. Desperate for original submissions, a blogging literary agent snaps, when her admonitions to “drop the portals, folks” fails to discourage a timeworn sci fi device.
Dear Evil Editor.
Homicide detective, Jennifer Castle, is faced with the impossible: [She must play the trombone and the violin simultaneously?] several people, including an unborn baby, have been killed by a weapon that couldn't possibly exist. [A unicorn horn?] [Evil Editor likes to guess; he's seldom right.] To solve the case, she is forced to reevaluate her concept of time in order to catch a vindictive killer from the future.
Michael Spinner has been given the opportunity he craved: to travel back in time and kill the man who ruined his life. [Why does he have to travel back in time to kill him? Wouldn't it be easier to just kill him now? Or did someone else beat him to it?] But things go horribly wrong [Thanks to a minor miscalculation, when he appears in the past, he's thirty-seven miles out in the Pacific Ocean, in shark-infested waters.] when his actions unwittingly pull Jennifer Castle into the case. [Technically, can actions do anything unwittingly?] The one woman who can defeat him. The one woman who just happens to be the nexus of time-travel itself. [Is the nexus of time travel itself always a person? If so, how is it determined which person?] Can he kill her, [Busy day, when you have to kill both the man who ruined your life and the woman who's the nexus of time travel itself.] or will her death mean his own destruction? [Good point. If he kills her, some murderer she captures two years from now may stay at large and end up killing him. If Evil Editor were in this position, he would skip the killing and make a fortune wagering on sporting events that he knows the results of.]
Irrevocably connected to time travel by the circumstances of her birth, [Since she was forced to reevaluate her concept of time to solve this case, one might think she only recently became the nexus of time travel itself. If she's been the nexus since birth, wouldn't she have reevaluated long ago?] Jennifer finds herself caught in a battle that might not only ruin her present, but destroy her future. [Are ruination and destruction equally bad? If so, we could just say, might ruin both her present and her future. Actually, we can forget about the present, as it is no more than a microsecond.] [Actually, we used ruin and destruction in the previous paragraph; let's find something new.] [Her big problem in the future will be getting credit. Whenever she phones to apply for a card, it goes:
Jen: I'd like to apply for a VISA card.
VISA: Okay, great. Name?
Jen: Jennifer Castle.
VISA: Date of birth?
Jen: 4/24/67 . . . 8/28/ 73 . . . 12/21/09
VISA: I just want your birth date
Jen: I have infinite birthdays. For I am the nexus of time travel itself.
VISA: (Click.) ]
My 100,000 word novel, Portal to Murder will appeal to fans of cross-over mysteries like Michael Crichton, James Rollins or J.D. Robb. [I had no idea Crichton, Rollins and Robb were all fans of crossover mysteries; as for whether your novel will appeal to all three of them, only time will tell.]
Homicide detective Jennifer Castle is faced with her toughest case: solving a murder committed with a weapon that can't possibly exist. Only by reevaluating her concept of time can she hope to collar a vindictive killer from the future.
Michael Spinner has been given the opportunity he craved: to travel back in time and kill the man who ruined his life. But things go horribly wrong when his actions pull Jennifer Castle into the case. The one woman who can defeat him. The one woman who just happens to be . . . the nexus of time-travel itself!! Can he kill her? Or will her death mean his own destruction?
Irrevocably connected to time travel by the circumstances of her birth, Jennifer finds herself caught in a battle that could eradicate her future.
My 100,000-word novel, Portal to Murder should appeal to fans of cross-over mysteries. Give the word, and I'll have it to you last month. For I am . . . the nexus of time-travel itself!! Thank you.
It's a bit brief, but if you answer a few of Evil Editor's questions, it might fill out nicely.